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All Comments on 'Another Dream'

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LeBrozLeBrozover 17 years ago
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Lost in the feeling, but could use some tweaking to tighten it up some;

But for now that second to last line needs some quicky work

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duddle146duddle146about 17 years ago
Pleasant

Til I hit 'stars apear' I was feeling pretty good about this one. A little more attention to correct spelling would enhance the loveliness of this rendering.

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