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jthserrajthserraover 12 years ago
wonderfully erotic, but

you've mixed your metaphor moving from flower petals to an orchestral arch. I see... feel the image but I think the overall poem would be that much more powerful if you maintained and supported the single metaphor throughout, building upon the singe image. Either way it is some excellent erotica.

well done,

jth

tazz317tazz317over 11 years ago
TO BEND WITH THE PHYSICAL OR MENTAL

the trick is to return to the original. TK U MLJ LV NV

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