All Comments on 'Bethlehem'

great use of words here... like...Imperial purple is pissed up the wall

Old George lost his farm to perdition and all....love the rhythm in this ...and the message as well...ty...blue

The first two lines are a knockout, and I can't help but think you could have done much more with them than you did. There are fine lines throughout, but some seem forced to me, a few to fit the rhyme scheme, a few not. And that scheme itself seems not only scattered, but one that might not be beneficial at all.

It is obvious to me that you are brimming with skill, though. I would just prefer the poem be a bit more fluent and reachable.

Insane Asylum - Bedlam? Colley Cibber's Dad - King George III- Divine right of Kings - US independence - but who is Dr Willis?

Horror of the divine right of kings

To whip or not

Depending on the day's whim.

If you're religeous be prepared for a literary shock. Strange mixture of words and phrases.

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 34,500 poems.

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an EXCELLENT poet! the lesser of the "poets" here should take notice and learn from you, Ishtat. well done!!!

when does it ever cease. TK U MLJ LV NV