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blank, blank, blank is too much. Boring word. Maybe change it some. Cut it back to one or two blanks. It's a small change that could improve it.

Blank

Put on the cloak of invisibility

Blank

Take off the cloak

Make an entrance

Dazzle and bedazzle

Shine your light

Smile through it all

You’re still just blank though

Your cloak is still on

They don’t see you

They never will

Why?

Because to them

You’re just and always will be

Blank

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sincerely,

unregistered and anonymous

but avid reader

To Avid, Anonymous and Unregistered reader

Whilst I appreciate your support and criticism of Blank, it was however named aptly “Blank” for a reason. The word ‘blank’ as boring and uninteresting a word as it is, was also chosen for exactly that reason. The reason behind ‘blank’ being used three times, is one of a personal nature, one in which I refuse to make comment on, in such a public forum. However I’m sure that if you contact me we can discuss the merits of using the word blank three times..

Cinderella’s Glass Slipper

Psychological invisibility's far more insidious

And deadly than any physical possibility.

I liked this different way of composing. The Blank Blank Blank seems to somehow fit the situation described in this poem. Interestingly different!

I get the feeling that you were just 'going through the motions' ...serving an obligation that you had to be there.. but yet no one acknowledges your presence.

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