Canine Style…

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Canine Style...

Skin glistening in rapture
Beads of moisture dancing
Her spirit prime for capture

On hands and knees moaning
Swaying rhythmically to and fro
In an offer of carnal atoning

Breasts bouncing with nipples pendent
Moisture dripping with lusts lactation
His kneading fingers a fastidious attendant

Muscles tense with exertion
Piston like in perpetual motion
Mind expanding fireworks since insertion

Tunnel vision draws focus like a bow
Darkness is shattered by omnipotent light
The arrow's shaft quivering deep below

She howls in exhaustion at the full moon
Collapsing in a pool of wrought emotion
A canine act with an orgasmic boon


An Original Composition by:
Quivering Quill
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Quivering_QuillQuivering_Quillabout 11 years agoAuthor
Pendent...

Erectus, once again I am humbled at your observations and appreciate your constructive insights.... i did mean 'pendent', it means ; jutting out, suspended from above, overhanging.... I do try to be congruent, and there are times when I miss the mark.... I appreciate your read and review reciprocation. Thank you!.

erectus123erectus123about 11 years ago
the last three lines are very good

i think you mean pendant- to hang, pendent is a piece of jewelry worn around the neck

lust's lactation- *this is a possessive, but is she pregnant or lactating? is this the word you want, I get it but don't really like it

tunnel vision- a med condition, appropriate word choice?

I like these three lines a lot "She howls in exhaustion at the full moon

Collapsing in a pool of wrought emotion

A canine act with an orgasmic boon|" boon is a nice word, a blessing

I would suggest working backward, keeping the lust aspect but cleaning up the language a bit so it resonates like the last 3 lines, don't hesitate to check meanings in a dictionary. spell check is not enough and makes errors--yes, don't sell doggy style short, although to rear end a big butt you better have an inch or two extra in that piston. Don't rush this stuff out, more time and you will put together some great stuff....

Quivering_QuillQuivering_Quillabout 11 years agoAuthor
Tightness, Appreciation..... are

.....appreciated comments... However, appreciation might be a subjective perspective... I will attempt to tighten up.... Again, I am honored to have illicit ed your constructive input... Thanks

SweetOblivionSweetOblivionabout 11 years ago
She sounds more like a train than the "bitch" of your desires

Less doodling and scribbling and more tightness and appreciation of form would make her howl more poetically. Smiles S.O.