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Click hereCanine Style...
Skin glistening in rapture
Beads of moisture dancing
Her spirit prime for capture
On hands and knees moaning
Swaying rhythmically to and fro
In an offer of carnal atoning
Breasts bouncing with nipples pendent
Moisture dripping with lusts lactation
His kneading fingers a fastidious attendant
Muscles tense with exertion
Piston like in perpetual motion
Mind expanding fireworks since insertion
Tunnel vision draws focus like a bow
Darkness is shattered by omnipotent light
The arrow's shaft quivering deep below
She howls in exhaustion at the full moon
Collapsing in a pool of wrought emotion
A canine act with an orgasmic boon
An Original Composition by:
Quivering Quill
A Scribbles & Doodles Creation
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Erectus, once again I am humbled at your observations and appreciate your constructive insights.... i did mean 'pendent', it means ; jutting out, suspended from above, overhanging.... I do try to be congruent, and there are times when I miss the mark.... I appreciate your read and review reciprocation. Thank you!.
i think you mean pendant- to hang, pendent is a piece of jewelry worn around the neck
lust's lactation- *this is a possessive, but is she pregnant or lactating? is this the word you want, I get it but don't really like it
tunnel vision- a med condition, appropriate word choice?
I like these three lines a lot "She howls in exhaustion at the full moon
Collapsing in a pool of wrought emotion
A canine act with an orgasmic boon|" boon is a nice word, a blessing
I would suggest working backward, keeping the lust aspect but cleaning up the language a bit so it resonates like the last 3 lines, don't hesitate to check meanings in a dictionary. spell check is not enough and makes errors--yes, don't sell doggy style short, although to rear end a big butt you better have an inch or two extra in that piston. Don't rush this stuff out, more time and you will put together some great stuff....
.....appreciated comments... However, appreciation might be a subjective perspective... I will attempt to tighten up.... Again, I am honored to have illicit ed your constructive input... Thanks
Less doodling and scribbling and more tightness and appreciation of form would make her howl more poetically. Smiles S.O.