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by Christopher Titus

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Syndra LynnSyndra Lynnalmost 20 years ago
good message

wants to be a good poem. edit?

Unable to brace the blow

You mind screams in agony

Should this be: Unable to brace for the blow; Your mind...

and farther down; let should be yet?

LeBrozLeBrozover 17 years ago
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Concur with Syndra's assessment, needs a good edit. Don't take it too badly, smaller errors show up glaringly in the better poems, as this is.

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