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Senna JawaSenna Jawaabout 10 years ago
ok

Partners get boring; -- banal (but harmless)

I get lost in a crowd; -- cliched

Drunks end up snoring; -- banal; drunks+snore? work harder at poetry;

Screamers are too loud; -- ditto;

Critters aren't legal; -- somewhat interesting language;

Teens tend to swell a bit; -- unclear (hence not too useful) but harmless;

I ache when spread-eagle; -- graphic (and a bit of a cliche; but where is poetry?)

Think I'll stay celibate. -- a transparent attempt at humor, not original, not really funny.

You seem to have an ok brain. Use it, use it way harder. Peace.

patientleepatientleeover 10 years ago
As my students would say...

Dafuq? Fun little ditty. :-)

tazz317tazz317over 11 years ago
WHEN YOU ONLY HAVE 1 OPTION

which to choose, TK U MLJ LV NV

jthserrajthserraover 17 years ago
I think she'd approve...

Nicely Parkerish... a hint of meter and wit. Well done.

LeBrozLeBrozover 17 years ago
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