All Comments on 'Cobweb Blues'

This poem was mentioned in Wednesday's New Poems Reviews.

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is one very neat poem. Well done, Bill.

Typically clever Dada -- not sure it absolutely needed the last line, however...

Has a wonderful oriental simplicity, shed of all unnecessary dressing.

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....can filter out the grounds to get the essence quite like you. Lovely!

Tess

I love it Bill. I could see where it was going, I thought, lol ... Nice imagery here with a splash of humor ... More Please~~~

...a poem that can surprise me, especially when it managed it in so few lines. Well done.

...clever lil' write (~_~) I like!

I thought the truck stop was needed, gave a bluntness to the poem, really drove the point, making sure there was nothing cutesie about this poem.

I only wish that there was more white space as a default at the end of the poem between the last line and the "– Click here for a bio and to find more submissions by Bill Dada."

The only way around it is to add code for a line break or two at the end of your submissions. < br >

I know it is nitpicky, but it seems that a poem like this deserves a pause before the literotica imput line. Okay, just a little neurosis of mine. Carry on, Bill :)

On the road! Reminds me of a Kerouc haiku, his better ones.

grabbed my attention and the short images were tight and direct...nice senryu

blue

Very nicely done.

comes from a mulitude of places,

and thus, even the waitress at

the truck stop.

I loved your quick witt and word play,

and wrapping it up so neatly

in very short lines...

If I were the waitress,

you could nearly bet, there

would be scribbles on the back of my

order pad, I love you's, and IOU's..

clever, very clever ~

With firm peaches and a smile-

sGp

it's short....and brilliant! and sad, but true, said very well. ;)

I enjoy your work, ~ NJ