All Comments on 'Constitutional'

by demure101

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HarryHillHarryHillabout 11 years ago
Can almost hear the footsteps

thanks

SweetOblivionSweetOblivionabout 11 years ago
wonderfully evocative

well done again. S.O.

twelveoonetwelveooneabout 11 years ago
5ed

as always

not unpleasant

two negatives to make a positive?

along the silent streets and sleeping squares -

best line

the quiet night, its ghostliness enhanced

worst line, technically correct, but enhancing ghostliness seems like an oxymoron, and I get the feeling you should be showing me not telling me

LET us go then, you and I...

Like a patient etherized upon a table;

twelveoonetwelveooneabout 11 years ago
further

yes, I think

your usage is quite correct, but has a rather abhorrent ring as an the EOL, now that may be your intent, but it did come off as rather comical to me, suggest either a slight shift, or rewording to get the -liness out of ghost

DawnJDawnJabout 11 years ago
I can see it...

...I can hear it. I can hear you! Great vignette!

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