All Comments on 'Days Like These'

like this and like your style.

it's how I'd like to write...but haven't found the right words.

you did

Thank you

I hope you don't mind a couple small suggestions. I see two lines that could lose a word or two.

"seem ordinary, cheap"

You could drop cheap.

This may sound nicer:

"And there are days

when roses devoid of fragrance,

seem ordinary."

"are played over and over for comfort"

How about:

There are days

when memories of love

are played over for comfort.

Thanks for sharing your poem.

For the most part, I really like this, the strong, self evident imagery works very well. I found the repepating "There are days" a little off putting though. I understand what you were aimimng at, but you worked that line a little bot too much IMO.

Still, thumbs up!

I like the theme and your approach.

I might have considered making the second stanza of each pair an opposite/contrast to the first. - Have an "up" day versus a "down day, but that might be for another poem.

Keep writing (and I see you have).

that needs a bit of editing, I think--and it's well worth saving so if you agree I'd make a few fixes. Specifically, I agree that "There are days" is too prosaic; just "Days" would be stronger, imho. Also "nice" is well..nice; it's not an evocative enough word, and "yell out" seems off. Still, this is overall really really good. :)