by seasparks
Brings me back to when I was younger and could think of some adventure to dream about just before falling asleep and them be able to live the adventure in my dreams. That was so much fun. Sounds like it's time for me to try that again - wish me luck!
one suggestion that you may find helpful (maybe not) is... well, here's an example:
An excerpt from your poem:
I know I'm in a dream.
I dream of strange adventures.
I dream of loves won and lost
I dream of the future, and of the past.
I dream of things I've always wanted to do
And I dream of the things I've done.
How about trying:
I know I'm in a dream.
I dream of strange adventures,
of loves won and lost.
I dream of the future, and of the past.
I dream of things I've always wanted to do
and of the things I've done.
It may help to get rid of an "I" or two.
Many of your "poems" are 1st person journal style writing like most of dcpoet44's, except of higher literary quality. You might want to try Bloging.
You have a fantastic way of taking your readers on a journey with you.
Great poem!!!!!!! ;-)