All Comments on 'Faceless'

It makes for a decent rock song, I can hear it in mah head.

'By then it's all over' sounds like it needs something before it to match what you have three lines back.

I dunno about 'before I can try once again'... seems to mess up the flow a little.

I'm imagining that you slow down on the third section then pick it back up on the last one, right? I think you need two more lines before 'I tried' about the futility of getting back with that Queen B that shut the door on his face. It just seems like that last section needs to be a bit longer, is all. Should match your previous sections and allow for a good finale that doesn't feel like it came too soon *wink wink*.

Overall, I like it. Not sure if it's one you could name a record with, but it's definitely got good potential for a bit of head bangin'. If I sound fulla shit, please understand, I've never truly made music before. Tooling around on a piano and a guitar at beginner level is all I've got.

Lemme know what you think. Oh yeah I left a comment on your other poem, lemne know what you think on that too, ye? Cheers!

Thank you for the beautiful poem. Every ,lline described me and my state of mind.

Congratulation and please, write more poems. VB.