All Comments on 'Fall into Me'

standard :)

Very nice rhythm and effective use of line breaks, I feel I would cut a few words here and there, i.e.

Electric pulses fuse us together

In a give and take relationship.

You kiss my tongue, nip my lip,

Breath against my electric skin.

Lightning bolts strike my core

Their echoes throw my head back.

electric pulses fuse us

in give and take

kiss my tongue, nip my lip

breath against my electric skin (I love this line :)

lightning bolts strike

echoes that throw my head back

Please forgive the intrusion but I did enjoy the read.