All Comments on 'First Jump'

or maybe not considering the cirumstance. Full of imagery that grabs the senses--I felt as if I were there with you, and then well...you peed, lol. Good stuff, jd. :)

...the "familiar warmth between my legs" was a more climatic, sexual thing. I did, in fact, get a hardon the first time. The obvious meaning was serendipity, and never struck me until later... (Duh!) Blame it on that silly-bitch muse of mine.

takes a special man to get a hard on facing death.

I am not one of them.

I loved this verse:

~Icarisian fool

hot wax drips

from your arms~

That's my view of skydiving.

Nice work even with the misunderstood ending

This is a fun read. I like the subtitles. Tell us about

the landing. The familiar warmth - are you sure it wasn't

coming out the other end? good JOB

this was a great read-- yeah familiar warmth between the legs did not give me a hard on kind of feeling either, but damn, you should do advertising for the international sky jumping association

But laughing out loud never gave me a hard on! This wasn't a tandem jump, was it?

This poem is mentioned in the New Poems thread on the forum.

I grinned all the way thru this! I've never sky dived, nor have I ever had a hard on in the classic sense... But when I first started building bridges I got some very erotic weird feelings goin on inside me! Being scared has always been a turn on for me; it's nice to see I'm not alone! Thanks!

Love it. That ending is so obviously filled with sexual connotations, it must mean loss of bladder control. Forgot that truism to go with the first impression ~ it is sexual!

This poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 39,000 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.<br>

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