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inspires those to dream and hope, TK U MLJ LV NV

You have a light delicate touch with rhyme that I think works really well for you. Think you need a period after "clouds" and even though the poem is short it might benefit from a line of space between "clouds" and "I gaze... ." Just my opinion, of course, but I think that extra pause would work well there. Thanks for the read!

in particular:

mocking the October clouds

this might be better if s's where spread out more:

Stowed inside

my silent heart a song still half unsung

will softly sound

5ed of course

"I gaze upon a younger dream come true

if only for a moment "

A moment of the heart shared. Beautiful and sensuous!

a lute suspended