All Comments on 'Freedom'

Five.

There was another version of this the other day, right?

Big improvment here. Nice to see a poet take the time and effort to reflect on their writing and come back stronger.

for me, this would hold more oomph if you ended it with that great phrase

past the stony face of life

where I am not a lesion

the final lines smack of cliché, but if you used Phoenix as your title, i don't think the allusion would be lost on the reader.

Like this a lot definitely a five