All Comments on 'From time to time'

it does, and you drew me in with the innovative 'carnation breasts' (you have a typo there, btw), and the sugar-cube imagery. however, 'subtle lambent' feels a little overworked for the line, not the concept but the actual wording, and then your lines:

Unfold your creases fermented with the

Asexual fragrance of a ancestral virgin

make me mentally back away from your write. it's not a good effect to have on your reader :( plus, another typo... a = an. i can see what you're getting at, but the wording makes me feel a little queasy, to be honest.

not sure the images you deliver with honeycomb penis/penis as the silver lining of a stormy cloud quite work together to best effect. either one works, and quite well, but the overlapping of them seems to detract from them as individual, strong images.

what you have going for this is some originality; just be wary about setting one image against another in conflict rather than in support and look to your word-choices with a little more care. keep writing! i enjoyed the read.

silver lining of stormy cloud is the only weak point. We all have those moments where we settle on a line instead of trying for something greater. good work overall.