All Comments on 'Going Down'

but I do read them and this one is a tour de force. It's at once really disturbing and exquisitely crafted, Each trio of lines moves the action of the descent with great images like "sullen walls" and "timid light." And then in the end the meaning is as murky as the water. That is just great use of language imho. I really enjoyed the read. Thank you.

a superb journey into a city's decay , grime 'n impermanence ........sad , hard-hittin , sharply etched imagery !!! High 5-ed !!

...and so well done! I walked along with the "cameraman", noting the changes to the terrain, and the character of the city, as they registered on the screen. How brilliant is this! :)

Felt like I was walking with you seeing what you saw and feeling the feelings. Such a complete picture with so few words. Beautifully done, Demure.

Five.

As they all have said – really good

And so nice to see this shift in style from your recent strong metaphor to purely redolent lyrical. Beautifully shaped with the descent from city’s salubrious centre through darker picturing and then the shift to the river, then moon. Absolutely spot on. You continue to keep us on our toes.

No rhyming for the last two lines this time either – I eventually noticed.