All Comments on 'gunfight'

it doesn't feel like this poem is about anything. Your other poem about shouting into crayon boxes sort of meanders around the surreal, but it too seems to be missing a subject/object. I haven't read the other one. I guess, find something you want to express, find a focus for your poems and try to say something fresh.

I think your line breaks are strange at times, and your epigraph doesn't to my mind fit your poem (perhaps I'm being overly simplistic there), but the poem overall makes a more coherent impression on me than your others did.<p>

All I think I'll say, lest I get even more pedantic.

Eerie. I liked it. Very different choice of subject matter. I am a big fan of out of left field stuff. I want more.