All Comments on 'Haiku Cycle'

"Dew glistens in fields

Of pink flowers opening

To receive his gift."

Superb.

Five.

You hurt yourself by calling it Haiku Cycle, this is pretty much short line free verse and as such, you are liberated from count.

100

Haiku is like porn, I know it when I see it, and this ain't it. Two images one moment, no closure, possibly a season word and the two images shouldn't directly flow from one and other.

However this is well written and works as a group of tercets or as a group poem. The name hurt you.

When I read it, I liked all of the first two lines but not the third, or action. It reads good and a five despite not being Haiku or the little nag.

Thank you all for the feedback.