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Some wonderful sexy lines ("lying there you between my thighs," "You're my sweetest sin" as examples) A suggestion, if I may? Don't let rhyme trap you into using words or phrases that may not be the best fit for the mood you are creating ("your technique is quite swell") I used to do that a lot. Better to write it without trying to rhyme and maybe go with that, or then see how rhyming might fit without using words that are obviously there only because they rhyme.

Looking forward to more of your work...

I can only echo Oldbear...My favourite lines are; 'your technique is quite swell' and

'You're my sweetest sin'...Well done!