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by Smokey125

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HoneyAdoredHoneyAdoredover 9 years ago
Your poetic cherry has burst all over this place

For me, your poem shone from the outset and there were glints of gold throughout.

The only line I struggled with was;

'Offer I my lonely heart her for the taking'

and that was because I just could not get it off my tongue, I got a bit tongue-tied.

On the whole, I loved it.

Well done and please write more poetry.

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Writing lesbian erotica has become one of the most important things in my life. I try to make all my main characters at least reasonably three-dimensional, and balance out the Smokey Sagas between sweet, fluffy, light-hearted pieces with happy endings, and rough, sinister tale...