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I am uncomfortable with the word "lost" here, it seems to take it in a direction you may not want.

"in my flat lost space"

12 says that lost may take you in a different direction. My problem with lost is the way it sounds in that line. Flat/lost is not an appealing combo. Those words side by side sound like a thud. Since you repeat flat, you could also repeat empty. Flat, empty space. It has a better sound, though it may change the meaning.

Yes, much ado over a word. :)

That 'flat lost space' might not be such a good phrase at first glance,

But look at how much better it works with that last line;

Makes it a bigger kicker.

Loss of desire ~ lack of will - should I take desire with me - or cast it aside.