All Comments on 'I Call For A Lover'

Now that's good fucking poetry. The type of which we need more.

bedazzle me with vehemence.

yes.

Be careful for what you ask;

be careful in where you ask it;

lest you step out your door

and find a line 4 blocks long;

I'll be at its head, ready

for you to wear me out.

Now this is what I call EROTIC poetry! Hell JC this is an erotic masterpiece! You have blown me away with this one!

You keep them coming girl and we'll all keep loving them!

I disagree with LeBroz' s comment - He would be BEHIND me in the queue.

Please, Jennifer, can I fulfil you need? Just call and I'll be there!

Brilliant poem. Brillant sentiment. Had me wanting you all the time I was reading it.

The repetition flows with it nicely. Not my usual taste, but well done.

I love how this starts out with mental complexity. Using big words such as Eradicate and vehemence. The first stanzas come from the mind the head...then work down and out. From the body down to basic primal needs. You touch on so many things.. power, and manipulation..frustration. Working through life to the simple.. a call for completion. Nice work Jen keep going

du~

Wowza Jenn.

You hit tha nail on tha head gurl.

Very Hott poem here. You started slow,

and ended in flames. Erotica that Scorches ~!!

Keep'm Cummin My Friend ~ *grins*

your poem has been mentioned in the thread

"New Poems Reviews"

thanks for the journey~

this will indeed keep ones dance card filled...winks...blue

hell yes.

this is a fine

firey

display

of exactly

the way i feel.

great stuff.

Come on, tell us what you really want.

I call for a lover

to eradicate my wants,

gratify my needs

and bedazzle me with vehemence.

Send me perfection personified

to cover me in stimulation

and smother me in sex.

Strip my deprived body bare.

Shed me of unnecessary layers

and burrow beneath my skin.

Exploit my nakedness

and abuse my mind.

Ravish me with power.

Straddle me in strength

and harness my frustration.

Take me.

Own me.

Satisfy my every craving.

Leave me with no mistake

that you were here.

I call for this

I call for a lover

I call for you.

everyone is giving you a strike, but I thought it needed

a bit more mystery. I did like the way you laid 'I Call

For A Lover' out, but I saw nothing new or different. A nice

4. sand

to all who have commented ~

sand ~ thanks for your honesty

it's appreciated, i'm still learning.

Thanks for the suggestion ~ I actually

really like the rewrite!

many thanks to you all

~ Jenn

(Gentle Smile)... you have my Attention (Again) Pretty Lady...

NW Wolf...

I agree with Du and Syndra Lynn. Like Du, I liked how you started with the mind and worked down the core of it. I am confused about you liking anonymous' rewrite. The rewrite seemed like your original poem except for leaving out some of the good stuff. For instance anonymous leaves 'fuck me' out of the poem in the rewrite. That is like ripping the guts out of the poem.

ty,bd