by foehn2
The line "Your hair is badly placed/when it is not flowing through my fingers" is exquisite. I enjoyed reading this very much.
I die in all the death
of the world, that lives so brightly...do you really want a comma there? Approaching BadNerudaville
Go ahead, sic the comma police on me. I'll plead nolo contendere and be out in no time. As for BadNerudaville, Neruda never wrote this well, in my sometimes less than humble opinion.