by kiten69
Kiten69, I really like how this speaks clearly and honestly of need and desire and hope. The first rule of good writing is to have something to say - and you do. The second rule is to say it as honestly as possible - and you have. Bravo for opening up for our enjoyment.
Something struck me with this poem. Wonderfully written and simply beautiful.
As sack said, difficult not to be cliched, but you avoided the trap.
Really enjoyed this.
Elle
not as cliche ridden as most poems on this topic. Could use a little tightening here and there, but a respectable first submission. Thanks for sharing this with Lit.!
This was a beautiful, moving poem. I don't read a lot of them, but I understood (or at least thought I did...I have to admit I'm clueless about poetry) what you were saying and it was touching. Nice job and thanks for an entertaining read.
Such a wonderful poem...filled with longing...yet hope and promise. Here's to you finding Him one day, darlin'.
Welcome to the Poetry side of Lit's house
With a piece mindful
Of solitary souls
Looking for the missing piece.
BTW - 'rhythym' slipped through; should be rhythm;
the key I use is rhy- th(e)m & me...rhythm & rhyme