All Comments on 'I wrote a poem'

file it under current events; it's sure to be needed again

Yes. There is absolutely no point in discouraging others for the sake of it; but, poetry, whatever its guise, needs to have form and consistent rhythm to be even journeyman-like.

And, then, there is that extra special something to make it evoke something in the reader. It can be incredibly hard to capture such a perfect pitch; and it is rare for anything like that to make an appearance amongst us amateurs. (My apologies to anyone here who writes for a living).

A puerile whine about criticism, which, incidentally, is benign here, compared to some other parts of lit, is simply foolish. If people give their time to make positive remarks, then listen - as you seem to indicate you will.

Objectively, your poem needs work to balance it between the caustic wit and the outburst of irritation you clearly feel. Have a look at the syllable count and the rhythm. Excite us with your anger. Amuse us with your wit. Don't just bleat about how unfair it all is.

I purposely didn't make this a great poem... barely a passable one... to show sometimes the message is deeper than the presentation... also want to add that the thin skinned writers I know are not here on lit but in the real world.