Impermeable

byNeonurotic©

The sky is wide open as is my mouth
while her unrequited love falls
and splits the ground.
Thunderstruck in the snow in the
only place in the world where it can.
This salty land, blowing wind
and ice that stings my eyes. Laughing,
or crying, I don't really know,
don't care, she confessed.
Sunrise sweet coffee and cake sits bitter,
like words that should've been said
long ago. It's too bad. I already moved on,
coattails waving at the shins, snapping
in step, one step at time until gone.

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by Ashesh901/03/13

Coffee is bitter & cake sweet but

Emotionsl turbulence hath juxtaposed tge taste @ sunrise In a masterly rendered poem !! Bravo !

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by demure10101/03/13

Owww!

Well done!

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by Angeline01/03/13

It's a 5 even if I can't vote!

This to me is a complex and powerful poem because it conveys so much: change and ending and loss that feels too cold to experience regret. There's such a feel of shift and change to it that it almost feelsmore...

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by tazz31701/03/13

AN "I" WORD AND A "U" WORD

can not stop the beat from going on, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by HarryHill01/03/13

I like this one

not only for the title (that means raincoat in French)

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