All Comments on 'It's All Pretend'

but I feel like some critical information is missing, and it's keeping me from really getting the point of your poem. You say a lot about what you don't mean and there are a few pronouns ("it," "him/you") that seem to be standing in for a story that isn't coming across to the reader. And yet I can tell there's much going on in this poem: it just needs to be approached more directly. Again, just my opinion, but I do think some rethinking and editing could bring this poem up to the promise it seems to hold. Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum.