All Comments on 'Jealousy'

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Ashesh9Ashesh9over 10 years ago
straight line highway to a

lonely place in as few words as possible : really dig your Minimalist style , Tod !

todski28todski28over 10 years agoAuthor
Just experimenting

Thanks for the feedback, gotta keep trying new things

AngelineAngelineover 10 years ago
You are being smart in your experimenting

I think you're building your understanding of both metaphor and rhetoric. Just my opinion and for an experiment it's not bad! I especially like

yellow fear

soiling clarity

twelveoonetwelveooneover 10 years ago
Interesting

yellow fear

soiling clarity

I think I just ran over him; yes probably the best, if you are interested in the tension created by minimal lines Senna Jawa has two lines in a thread nameless nonbeing check it out, you should probably read everything he says, he's no bullshit, but a advise caution in taking that route completely.

Now as to the colours are you painting a rainbow of death? The colours and the soiled are a little done to death.

Now you being a bouncer, I do want you to check out the first line in mine, just say it twice, sound not word meaning, you must have seen it a lot.

5ed because you are not doing walkthoughs

LesseloovesPeterLesseloovesPeterover 10 years ago

I like this, there's a lot here in little words...

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