All Comments on 'Kissing my cum'

Interesting. I think you could bring more emotion into this piece through language choices. There's a writing exercise where you rewrite something already written but say it with different words. This might be a good candidate for that.

Except I think I would have felt wierd. But then I'm maybe too damn hung up anyway and it does actually belong in her, right? Last line was great.

I will correct that.

don't think cum comes out of veins.