by My Erotic Tale
throws off the rhythm a bit. Read this aloud and that is more evident. I also would seek to eliminate the two "its" if you can...otherwise quite vivid, I liked the imagery.
At mournful memories
the old wolf howls,
while young join in
paying respectful homage.
Would have looked great illustrated with a wolf howling at the moon high overhead.
whatever happened to nwwolf I wonder...I think by leading him to this site...he found the pack of howlin females...nice pen...
Soft paws pounding
running over the soil
guided by the light
of moon rings coiled
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i'm thinking that *pounding* would be better to possibly say, "strike softly" and it will a more natural effect with nature. overall a nice piece art.......don