All Comments on 'Magic'

there being (work this though in your head, what am I doing?)

is no applause

end, stop

only silence

is overkill, all if these are worthy of some editing and some second thoughts. A5, tactically it would have been better to have either submitted either the first two, or one of the two at the bottom. They stand more of a chance of getting the attention they deserve. Another would have been to leave a few comments a few days before submitting the poems.

i found the line-breaks too disruptive here, even thought abruptness is important to the 'magic' of the disappearing act. different choices might improve this.

end line superfluous, but i'd definitely tinker a little with the rest as you've the makings of an interesting write. it's all there, just needs that extra push, for me.

Wasn't sure on the first read but on going through it again I can see it's merits and I rather like the end line