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This would really work great for a poetry reading. Ever been on stage? I'd get rid of the last stanza. It seems pointless in the poem. Kind of tacked on. It ends just fine with the stanza above it.

with both of Eve's points. Although if you were doing this live in a reading, the last stanza would actually work pretty well. Something 'punch line'-y is good for spoken word, better than on a page. But that's a hot little piece, truly.