All Comments on 'Mice in a Maze'

A five, but only on the assumption this part can be eliminated from the poem:

Surrender is for pussies

For those who lack heart

For those who lack honor

Surrender and suicide are synonymous

For even if you do not die

You do not live

these are good to great lines

"Sold to the God of Getting By"

"And that the only way to live the dream

Is to lay victim to it" - possibly could be modified.

Most of the rest, a little too obvious, some preachy

......the line breaks this would be prose. I agree there are some nice phrases and the idea is good.

Tess