by todski28
I had trouble with S3 tod:
"your lips soft
then teeth as
leather slips through loops..."
gave me the impression that teeth are soft.
"your ardour bruises my neck
marks me as your property"
great lines there.
force me down
to taste of your spice
clover bites apple sweet
a boiled treat of salt lick
......Cunnilingus as Poetry : I fived , Tod .
I.m easy, despite what every one says
OK S1 fine. nice pacing.
sharp senses would be a noun phrase - now, I' m not sure of what these things are:
senses sharp
resistance dulled
depths sought
go ask a grammar maven, but they look like metal laziness to me, and are rather common in new writers -the net effect for me is
poetry wrote
poetry read
reader bored...it looks affected, here
"stut-"
also. overdone effect
scratch, snag, bruise, force - This pome has some brutal moments amidst a relaxing romantic scene of drinking wine.
bare skin glides through fabric - This is poetic splendidness.
All making for an odd concoction that you pulled off without a hitch.
Hehe ..... I said concoction ...........