by Honey123
a very touching and heart felt write, excellent Hun (~_*)
... but somehow the cadence and rhythm didn't quite catch me the way some of your other poems do. It's a lovely poem, to be sure, but I get the feeling it's not saying everything you want it to say.
This might have been even better if you didn't try to make the lines rhyme, and used shorter sentences overall. I felt you were trying too hard for the rhymes, and that effected the flow of the poem.
I continue to watch as you stretch out as a writer and poet and I continue to enjoy that evolution...you have an honesty in your writing that I adore. I agree with sack about the rhyme scheme, but I also recognize one of my own limitations therein and admire your effort because of it.
And of course, these are eternal questions. The kind that there is never an easy answer for, which makes them the perfect topic for poetry. I continue to be one of your biggest fans...
Reading this, I felt as if we could see into your mind, your thoughts, your soul. The emotion really comes through, darlin'.
Just a hunch but I think you desire more that just one day, like I said just a hunch.
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Beautiful!
I am looking forward to reading each and every Poem and Story that this Lovely Authoress has posted here on the site :)
Honey...I have just started reading you work and I am very impressed...you have a great talent and it appears a strong following...you show a great deal of the emotion that fuels your words...lovely...
Amazing write, I loved it from the beginning to end. In my eyes it was flawless, wonderful job!