by demure101
walking down, 1 struts 1 sags, need more to be said. TK U MLJ LV NV
is hard to pull off. Pretty good, but too many "it's" in the first stanza IMO. I'd emphasize the central image as early as possible. The enjambment's pretty good. I particularly liked " ...houses. High/Up dirty gables.." I might have started the poem with L2S2, in fact, because it's so good.(There's that "it's" again. LOL)
"Losers Lane" felt like a cliché to be honest, particularly at the end of the poem.
All considered, however, I enjoyed reading it.