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LeBrozLeBrozalmost 18 years ago
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Wow! This is waaaay different for you ~ or have I been playing hooky for too long? What works here is that you've kept it short without too many run on thoughts.

creammuffincreammuffinalmost 18 years ago
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Good line: "Blowing seven double 'O' smoke rings in the afterglow."

The other lines about labia song, gum, secret weapon, etc. don't work very well - at least in this poem. The poem has potential, but needs work. Try to rise above your secret weapon. ;)

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