by lilywhite31
this could be a good poem. two points: 1)is the word 'might' in line 8 a typo, changing it to 'mighty' would sound better
2) consider using different images, too much concrete images makes the poem sound a little samey. suprise the reader!
Not much to add to cward2's thoughts;
just let me add
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