All Comments on 'Oh, How I miss You'

throughout, but perhaps if you turned it from prose to poetry it might flow more smoothly. Also watch for the common in terminology and strive for unique qualities in verse.

Keep at it--all is simply my opinion and expert I am not, as many will happily tell you ;-).

Espie makes my job easier, just follow around and agree (75). One comment:

Oh, but how I long to hold you; to feel you in my hand.

what are you holding? but the line does not seem to arouse interest, good tactic, is open with a grabber.

q. Why are the lines complete sentences?

Loved the content, but if the words can be transformed from prose to poetry format.....would make a world of difference.

Prose sentences do not a poem make which is a shame because with editting you could make something beautiful out of this