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I hope you got that out of your system :)

I don't feel this as a poem - the beginning and end are fine, but the two middle lines (how could..that..) sound like a debate with friends over a pint of beer. And more importantly, leave too little room for the reader to experience it personally. It's too set - not a discussion or an invitation to consider..but a statement.

Just my 2 cents. Oh, and penis envy? I totally believe in it.