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by Savannah Skye
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sackover 18 years agomaybe a bit too long....
From the 24 stanzas, you might want to pick 12-15 "killer ones" and rewrite the poem accordingly. It might emerge stronger even if you did that!
sackover 18 years agomaybe a bit too long....
From the 24 stanzas, you might want to pick 12-15 "killer ones" and rewrite the poem accordingly. It might emerge stronger even if you did that!
cymryover 18 years ago~
I would have to agree that it is a bit to long and needs to be pared down somewhat. There are some amazing lines though, such as:
"Pin-up girl
With Coca-Cola curves
To quench your thirst"
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