All Comments on 'Reiner'

I think this is lovely. The eliptic story telling gives so much more of a punch.

blame me for any strife.

admission to prejudice - don't like rhyming coups - but still sounds strained, word choice comes across as too strident, giving the feel of forced rhyme.

still attract the genre where ever they are , TK U MLJ LV NV

I agree quite a few forced rhymes although some would sound better if words were changed around i.e' Although it sometimes distorts my face', and 'He says, "How is your pretty German girl?". If I think I am putting in a forced rhyme I ask myself "Do people really talk like that?" and if the answer is no then I won't use it.

All that said the narration idea is good just needs some fine tuning!