All Comments on 'Relief'

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"...herself until the last" This is the ultimate triumph of the human spirit. Very nicely rendered!

This is good, but I don't think blank verse for the entire poem works well, given its narrative. It felt a bit contrived next to sudden death. I think a sentence fragment might have been more effective in your father's voice, rather than yours to start the poem.

I wouldn't change stanzas two and there. Here, I think blank verse does work inasmuch as there's reflection by the poet, and then transitioning to sentence fragments in the third stanza while still maintaining the rhythm works well in my opinion. However, I would have made the sound of the poem disruptive in the concluding stanza because of "pain" and "darkness."

This, of course, is just my perspective, Demure, and I do like your poetry very much.