All Comments on 'Smile for Me'

ray of sun with every word that comes from your beautiful world...am so

glad you are writing again...some of these lines are well crafted the un-illusional

real works great with the flow..thanks for sharing your light...blue

stanza is okay but the rest of the poem collapses after that.

Your language suffers from being too cliched and saccharine. The last two stanzas, in particular, are a good example of that.

Perhaps you could develop the poem around the imagery in the first stanza. Focus on the details that tell the poem. Drop anything not relevant.

It's been a long time (for both of us!). Nice to read your work again. :)

-Curiouswife

Hey I was smiling before I read your poem. The fact that you're back had me smiling, the poem was a bonus.

Welcome back — you've been missed. Been so tied up these past 4 weeks+, didn't even realize you were back!