All Comments on 'Soul Swapping'

wow, Your poetry has deepened and gotten broader

very very good sweetie, but if I know the ninja soul

that inside you glows, your keen sight still looks down your cute nose <grin> wonderful poem

Swimming in a bag? I'd seriously reconsider bag.

I'd stick with the correct spelling of senile instead of playing with it to get an exact rhyme.

Get rid of the commas in the first two stanzas. They don't belong. And you have a few more unneeded ones scattered through your poem.

These two lines have potential:

the calm centered stillness, it has turned into rain

to stop my soul from swapping, on a ghostly plain

Please keep writing and reading poetry. Your writing will grow over time if you nurture it.

This poem illuminated from the soul and now shines.

Swapping yesterday for today!

A few too many commas and I

Have to say I think that ecstasy

is used too much in poetry but it

does kinda work here so i can let

that go, Over all I really enjoyed

this piece.

Good work,

thanks.

~ J

You know where your soul is today?

Sitting here reading your messages

You know where your soul is today?

Sitting here reading your messages

VERY DEEP AND MOVING POEM. GREAT SUBMISSION