All Comments on 'Taken by you'

If you don't mind, it really doesn't mater..... Nicely written and appreciated. Thanks for sharing.

I guess you hang out in secret cells I never found, in any event well written moving saga demonstrating the opposite of the feminist revolution. Technically, if I might suggest:

i felt a fear = might be "gave me a fear"

also, too many "and" that could be cut

burned with a wanting and lust= drop "and" here for matching cadence and effect

So to you i gave myself over = this line is awkward

Your filthy talk it gets me wet ="all" wet gives you cadence

also I love the small "i" and perhaps it is the true sub in you, or whoever is in you who dictates, but since e.e. commings (c.1930 although the glorious fucker seemed to live forever, it is a little out of date, but if you are happy go with it0 take a look at his Buffalo Bill poem tha ends with the line,

"he was a handsome man

and what i want to know is

how do you like your blueeyed boy

Mister Death

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