All Comments on 'Technologically Declined'

Mostly in the same venue as Angeline. My full sympathy though to the core feelings!

and the idea is great, but the language doesn't live up to the promise of this poem for me. I think it's too prosey, has too much explanation and not enough pure image. I think if you cut back on the telling and stuck with the images, you'd have a very funny sort of smarmy poem here. Thanks for the read. :-)