by Tzara
those were the days of wine and roses and you. TK U MLJ LV NV
As I went through your poems, I gave this another look. Having once lived in Elliot Bay, I know where Lower Queen Anne is and enjoyed the area. Although the imagery belongs to you, thanks for the view.
I was revising this poem as I wrote it and tried to submit a revision actually quite soon after my original submission (note to Literoticans--make your edits before submitting), but missed the window of changing it. My revised version reads: "At times // I can still see cherry trees across the street" which I think might address your concern.
Maybe not, of course. In any case, I really do appreciate your careful readings.
I always enjoy the lyrical quality of your poems. The words are melodious and the enjambment always connects so well with what follows.
I was a bit confused by the sudden change of verb tense in l8. It did make me wonder. I wasn't sure if you were speaking to your love here and now or reminiscing about a lost love.
was mentioned here-http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?p=40332378#post40332378
Beautiful work, congrats on the E! Wonderful read.
~ maria